刚刚从展会回来,想抓紧时间客户。由于第一次参展,跟踪邮件不知道怎样写比较好,希望大家能给我点意见加以。以下是我写的: dear mr.xx , i was so honor to meet you in hk mega show part 1, thank you for your visiting.
first of all , please let me introduce ourselves , our company specialize in this field for 10 years with the strength of outdoor umbrella,golf umbrella,gift umbrella,etc... we view your website carefully,and he much interested to bulid business relationship with you.
next email,i will send the detail information of umbrella which you asked in our booth.
any comment by return are much appriciated.
thanks and best regards sampo
网友回答:这么多语法错误,这种情况要是发生在我们公司,老早要被掉了。First of all , please let me introduce ourselves , our company specialize[->specializes] in this field for 10 years with the strength[strength是力量的意思,你肯定想表达specialized in producing xxx] of outdoor umbrella,golf umbrella,gift umbrella,etc... We view your website carefully啥意思?,and he much interested[much和interested不能连用, a lot of interest还差不多] to bulid business relationship with you.
网友回答:确实太长了感觉8楼的不错,简洁明了
网友回答:Hello*** Very glad to meet you in the fair.The following is the quotion of the item you selected.Please be note. If anything please feel free to let me know. Thanks.
网友回答:标题: Group Photo 客户 with 我们 on FICHi, ***, How are you doing? This is ** from ***.Glad to get your name card from FIC fair. Regarding the ***products your selected on the fair, glad to be informed that's our strong products! We are one of the biggest*** manufacturer and exporter in China.(优势)If you want know more about us or our products, pls revert me!Thanks&Best regards,Sincerely,JimOther Info. FYI--------------------------------------------------------------------
网友回答:好的,谢谢你。~~~
网友回答:I think your customer he the more interest on your product and your advantage than your introduce